Frankie Carr IGCSE bare vexed
Dear Isabelle Kerr
After reading your article ‘bare vexed’, in which you wrote on slang, I agree with some of the points you have made. I think when the youth use slang to communicate. The use of slang brainwashes them into using it on a daily basis. In the article you wrote you mentioned that some of the words that the youth use are “bruv” and ” peak”. The way the youth communicate is embedded in their minds because of how often they use slang.
Using slang is a bad way of communicating because the youth become accustomed to speaking In slang. If you go to a job interview they will not give you the job if you speak in slang instead of correct English. Speaking slang could also stop you from getting into colleges In the future which could have an affect on your future. I agree with some of the points you have made In the article, for example: you said ” regardless, the future of the English language looks bleak.” After reading this I agree with the point you have made. With the generation speaking like this the next generation of kids will start to understand slang more than they understand the English language. There will be a chain reaction in the way people speak.
English in many countries such as: America, England, Australia. Slang has become the way in which the youth speaks on a daily basis. Slang has become the main way of communicating for the younger generation.
There are different points which you have made in this article which I have agreed with. When you’re growing up in London where most of the younger generation communicate using slang. Going to school has an affect on the way you speak to people. When you are talking to your friends you start to talk slang to your friends because you get use to the way they talk to each other to you, and you get use to it and start talking like this to other people because you are use to it. There is a point which I have disagreed with for example: “ASBO- wielding yobs who cannot communicate properly”. I have disagreed with this because the youth are able to understand what the others saying and they can communicate correctly just not in the way the older generation communicate. I think the point you made was not completely true, if they speak in a different way to others it does not mean that they cant communicate properly, they just use a different way to talk to each other maybe because it is easier or because it is quicker. It may be easier for some of the younger generation to understand than correct English, and they should be able speak the way they want to speak. In conclusion I think that there is good points about why slang is bad and how it affects the youth, but I disagree with the last point in the article. Overall I agree with the article itself.
January 11, 2015 at 2:54 pm
Frankie, this is an encouraging first draft where you have articulated many of the main arguments made within the original article. You have started to add your own elaborations too. The tone is appropriate. Well done.
Targets:
1) There are too many grammatical innacuracies to be awarded top marks. The formality of your tone slips when your sentence structures are innacurrate.
2) You need to have a look at how your response is structured. The openin of your piece is very well structured, with clearly delineated paragraphs. However, towards the end of your response this begins to fade.
3) You need to draw out a few more points from the original article and elaborate on them further.
4) Use at least one ambitious piece of punctuation.
This would currently achieve:
Writing: 29/30
Reading: 7/10
April 24, 2015 at 10:34 am
Frankie, you often repeat phrases which makes your writing feel a little ’empty’. Try to make your argument progress, rather than simply repeating the same point.
You also haven’t fully engaged with the main arguments of the article. What about Shakespeare’s pioneering of slang? What’s the difference between using slang and placing it in the dictionary?